for Dannie
then, Charity
unexpectedly vanished
corralled it seems
by one of many sunless deities
sporting broad, irresistible smiles
in the ensuing clamor
for incidental engagement
amidst the hovering throng
a courtship of waxing moon
& waning star
we each stumble
toward infernal fissures
bluff & precipice
home to unknowns
scores of faceless
transient demigods
two souls careening
toward the other's
nameless abyss
my love
this is when some angels are born
when others are destined to fall
victim
to earthly desire
for succor & rapture
as touchstone
my fleeting shooting star
although brutally detached
at least for now
i am certain
you are home.
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10 comments:
Powerful. Thanks, Noxalio. Possible waining/waning error; although i could construct a case for doing that on purpose to suggest a sleeping-car. Besides, spelling doesn't count after Level 5. It's in the terms on the back of your Poetic License.
Loved the picture, too.
P.
" we each stumble toward infernal fissures " ... so well said.
a thoughtful poem. wonderful
The unexpected vanishing of anything leaves such a cavernous hole. And I wonder at it, as I always do, if slow removal would have been easier somehow. I never have an answer, for as soon as I settle on one, I discover the other more true.
wonderful... great when read loud.. nce words.
Peter, thank you for the heads up (oops) ...
ah Annie, that's so true ... the teeter-totter between the sudden and final jerk or the slow burn ... i have my doubts too ...
Noxalio, very welcome. I felt sooort of nervous telling you, but I hope you would do the same for me. Editing never seems to catch up with composition, does it? I'm still going through trying to make sure I have hard copies of everything, and finding !mistakes! where already the Hand That Edits had been a few times. Old, old, and bumbly is what I am getting.
oh, lines n shades, you're too generous ... i'm glad to hear from you ... :)
yes Peter, i too revise and correct constantly, even if no one notices (all the way to the first post - it's a bit of neurosis i think - ha ha) ... and never feel nervous re: input, it's always welcome ... and i shall do the same ...
thanx noxalio...
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